This week I chose to critique Alina’s letter to Mr. Gradgrind.
“Hi Alina, hope you don’t mind but I thought I’d use your entry to do my review on. I was looking to read someone’s letter to Mr. Gradgind and yours was the first I found.
I think you articulated your feelings towards Mr. Gradginds raising of Louise, my favorite line was “Put simply, she has been robbed of her childhood and as a consequence, she has become silent and detached.” as this feels like a direct verbal smack to Mr. Gradginds well deserved face. However, I think you could have gotten away with being a lot more punchey when it came to telling him off, but at the same time, I can understand why you chose to remain calm within your writing.
I look forward to seeing more of your posts in the future, have a great week!